transforming a sentence into a participle phrase

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My parents proposed that he and I open and run a Japanese restaurant together, mentioning the Japanese food cooking certificate I had.

Hi,

I am trying to insert the below sentence at the beginning of the sentence above after transforming it into a participle phrase .

"My parent couldn't stand my husband loafing around with no jobs for a long time."

Below is what I have provisionally settled for but I don't think the phrase accurately conveys the nuance of "the parents not being able to stand him"

Having seen my husband loafing around with no jobs for a long time,


Would there be better ideas?


Additionally, would there be a better substitute for "for a long time" which sounds a bit awkward in the sentence?

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"Unable to stand my layabout husband anymore....."
 

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Unable to stand my jobless husband loafing around,

Unable to stand watching my jobless husband loafing around,

What about this one?
 
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Of the two, I'd go for the first one. Brevity is the soul of [STRIKE]wit[/STRIKE] prose.
 
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