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    #1

    mistaking me for a boy

    Hi,

    I wrote a sentence below but I am not sure how it reads with native speakers.

    Every single person who calls my home, after hearing my voice and my name,
    asks me if I am a boy, mistaking me for a boy.


    Could you help me rephrase it if it sounds a bit awkward?
    The underlined part definitely needs some amendments but I don't know where to start.

    Thanks much.
    Last edited by rainous; 29-Dec-2011 at 07:58.

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    #2

    Re: mistaking me for a boy

    Quote Originally Posted by rainous View Post
    Hi,

    I wrote a sentence below but I am not sure how it reads with native speakers.

    Every single person who calls my home, after hearing my voice and my name,
    asks me if I am a boy, mistaking me for a boy.


    Could you help me rephrase it if it sounds a bit awkward?
    The underlined part definitely needs some amendments but I don't know where to start.

    Thanks much.
    It's a little repetitive. Is it important that the reader knows that not only are you mistaken for a boy, but also that the caller actually asks if you are a boy?

    If not, then "Everyone who calls my home, after hearing my voice and my name, mistakes me for a boy".
    Perhaps "Everyone who calls my home, after hearing my voice and my name, gets confused and asks me if I am a boy."

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    #3

    Re: mistaking me for a boy

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    It's a little repetitive. Is it important that the reader knows that not only are you mistaken for a boy, but also that the caller actually asks if you are a boy?
    Yeah. That' the problem...

    How about:

    "...mistakes me for a boy, asking me if I am a boy."

    still awkward and repetitive?

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    #4

    Re: mistaking me for a boy

    How about

    "Every single person who calls my home, after hearing my voice and my name,
    thinks I'm a boy"


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    #5

    Re: mistaking me for a boy

    The problem with your original is that it requries each and every caller to say "Excuse me, are you a boy?" I doubt that is really happeneing.

    ... mistakes me for a boy.
    ... assumes I'm a boy.
    ... thinks I'm a boy.

    As the others have said.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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