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    Please, proofread a tiny text

    Hello.

    As I was updating a social skills entry in my CV, I began to hesitate whether or not it seems good to someone who would read that.
    Here is the text:

    I consider myself as a hardworking and self motivated person. I do believe that sometimes we may experience problems with the basis and I am not the special one. Nevertheless, I guess that my openness towards people is a good feature to work out any sort of a problem. I attended motivation seminars and I practice methods of controlling my mental activity and I think that is a very good way to increase productivity of my own. I am able and excited to perform complicated assignments. While I aim at doing my work properly, I highly understand that work have to be done in time.

    Could you please comment on that? What do you like or dislike?
    The highlighted part is the one I am not sure whether I should use it.

    Thanks, Alex.

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    #2

    Re: Please, proofread a tiny text

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    I do believe that sometimes we may experience problems with the basis and I am not the special one.


    NOT A TEACHER


    I most respectfully suggest that most native speakers would not understand the

    meaning of that sentence.

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    Re: Please, proofread a tiny text

    Quote Originally Posted by TheParser View Post
    NOT A TEACHER
    I most respectfully suggest that most native speakers would not understand the
    meaning of that sentence.
    Yes, I shouldn't have used it. Actually I heard that in a movie and I was not sure if I got the meaning of this phrase right. The language of the movie was unusual to me and I think I couldn't provide any context to make it clear. So I won't use it.

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    Re: Please, proofread a tiny text

    [QUOTE=AlexAD;838244]

    I attended motivation seminars and I practice methods of controlling my mental activity and I think that is a very good way to increase productivity of my own.


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    (1) As I type this, none of the teachers has/have answered. So may I start?

    (2) Your paragraph is great.

    (3) May I point out a few minor points that may interest you:

    (a) self-motivated. (hyphen)

    (b) Maybe "eager" is a "better" word than "excited" in your paragraph.

    (c) Work has to be done on time.

    (d) Finally, that long sentence with "and" should, IMHO, be revised. But I

    do not have the confidence to suggest how. Hopefully, some other posters

    will suggest some effective revisions.

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    Re: Please, proofread a tiny text

    Thank you, TheParser!
    It was very nice of you to read all the text and suggest some improvements.
    It counts for much with me.

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    Re: Please, proofread a tiny text

    Quote Originally Posted by TheParser View Post
    I attended motivation seminars and I practicse (British spelling of the verb) methods of controlling my mental activity. I think that this is a very good way to increase my own productivity
    of my own
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    (d) Finally, that long sentence with "and" should, IMHO, be revised. But I do not have the confidence to suggest how. Hopefully, some other posters will suggest some effective revisions.
    My suggestions above.

    I'd also write 'fully understand' rather than 'highly understand'.

    =Not an expert proofreader/editor=

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    Re: Please, proofread a tiny text

    Thanks a lot, 5jj.

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