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    Post Very short introduction to a story

    Hi everyone :]

    I've written a very short introduction to a story set in medieval times. English is not my native language, that is why I would like you to examine it ;) Here is the text:

    A thirst for taking vengeance upon wrongdoers, felt by aggrieved, is often insurmountable.
    Driven by the negative feeling, people are capable of doing gruesome things.
    A wistfully playing bard is worrying that Lara would not be able to resist the craving either.
    He is afraid of the harrowing aftermath of her deeds.
    A few days ago Brian along with his ring laid in wait in the hamlet for the Lara's band.
    Lots of blood have been shed. Also innocent.
    The locals did not manage to avoid getting drawn in.
    Too many have already perished.
    Finally, after a long and grueling clash, brigands went seperate ways, finding shelter in forests and licking their wounds.
    There's nothing else to do but wait for developments.
    However it would have been...

    Thanks in advice!

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    Re: Very short introduction to a story

    Thank you very much! I do appreciate your help :]

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