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Mr. TA

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Hello,

I am currently applying to different universities in the UK and the final sentence of my personal statement is as follows:

I have come to the conclusion that studying Masters X at University Y is the right choice for me and I would be very excited if I were to receive an offer.

I was wondering if this is correct or if it needs to say: ... I would be very excited if I received an offer

Thanks for the help!!

Mr. TA
 

Tdol

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Both are correct, but I would change excited. You called also use an infinitive- I would be honored/honoured/delighted to receive an offer (this avoids the outside chance implied by using the second conditional).
 
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