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    #1

    Please read this short dialog.

    Would you please read the following dialog and correct anything you find wrong?
    Thank you so much.

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    A: I want to be a good player like Messi. What should I do?
    B: You know, it's important to run fast and long during the match.
    A: I see. Thank you.
    B: Oh, and it's also important to pass the ball quickly and well to another player in your team.
    A: I'll keep that in mind.

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    #2

    Re: Please read this short dialog.

    A: I want to be a good player like Messi. What should I do? OK
    B: You know, it's important to run fast and long during the match.
    If it's said in a certain way then "You know" might be natural in conversation, but it looks a little strange written down.
    Also, "long" could mean different things so here are two ways I might write this line:
    B: Well, it's important to make long, fast runs during the match.
    B: Well, it's important to run fast and to keep running throughout the match.

    A: I see. Thank you. OK
    B: Oh, and it's also important to pass the ball quickly and well to another player in your team.
    "quickly and well to another player" isn't quite natural here, I would write something like:
    B: Oh, and it's also important to pass the ball quickly and accurately to other players in your team.

    A: I'll keep that in mind.


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    #3

    Re: Please read this short dialog.

    Thank you, Mr. JMurray.

    I hope you have a great day.

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