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Hello everyone, I have to fix my argument essay but all the teacher told me was " There are some grand generalizations made in the essay that you need to address. Remember to use qualifying terms to keep from having these grand generalizations." If any one knows more about grand generalizations and can give me an example of one in my essay it would help tremendously! I don't know what to change, cause I am not sure what is wrong
Going Green: It Starts With Us
Many people often wonder what the best foods are for themselves and their families. In a world that is constantly trying to achieve maximum health, it is no question why more people are turning towards a vegetarian lifestyle. New studies suggest that a well balanced diet could be the key to a long life. The daily fight for world hunger could be put to an end if more people simply knew the facts. There are several reasons people choose to follow a vegetarian diet instead of a meat based diet. Not only does a vegetarian diet improve one’s personal health, it is better on the environment and the well-being of animals.
Research has proven that meat is not an essential part of our diets and that it is actually healthier for people to avoid it all together. Health tends to be the main reason people switch to a vegetarian diet. Every nutrient which is necessary for human development can be obtained through plant foods. Several studies have shown that consuming meat greatly increases the risk of heart disease, which is the number one killer in America. There is also a strong correlation between eating meat and several diseases such as diabetes, osteoporosis, arthritis, cancer and obesity. Meat is high in saturated fats and deficient in carbohydrates. Vegetarians tend to be thinner and live longer than carnivores.
Diet is the most crucial attribute of human behavior in concerns to environmental impacts. The world’s current economic crisis could be ended if people changed their diet alone. Each day energy is wasted in the process of feeding the animals that will eventually feed the humans. At the moment, cattle and livestock consume majority of the grains which are produced in the United States. These grains which are being used to fatten animals that are being raised for food could be used to feed millions of hungry people.
Every year in the United States, billions of animals are raised in inhumane environments then brutally slaughtered for nothing other than human consumption. At these factories animals are kept in extremely overcrowded crates and cages without enough room to even turn around or take a single step. These animals often do not even see sunlight until the day they are being taken to the slaughter house. There is no question that animals feel pain and fear quite similar to humans. Knowing that meat consumption is unnecessary, it is inhumane and unethical to kill animals while there is an abundance of plant foods available.
Vegetarianism is an important cause that most people simply do not understand. Cutting meat products out of your diet can prevent, treat and even reverse certain degenerative diseases. Following a vegetarian lifestyle is not only good for one’s health, but it also has a positive impact on the world. One way to help diminish unnecessary suffering and killing of animals is to stop using them as a source of food. A well balanced vegetarian diet provides better health and a safer environment while helping cause less pain to innocent animals.
I have highlighted parts that I find to be generalizations. I've put qualifying terms in bold.
I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.