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    Poor style?

    Tom remember that Ann claimed that her mother refused to buy her a toy.


    Is it a sentence in poor style?

    Thanks so much

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    Re: Poor style?

    Quote Originally Posted by KSSEEJ View Post
    Tom remember that Ann claimed that her mother refused to buy her a toy.
    Tom remembers/remembered ...

    Is it a sentence in poor style?

    Thanks so much
    Yes, it's poor style, even with the correction.

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    #3

    Re: Poor style?

    Tom remembered that Ann claimed her mother refused to buy her a toy.

    or

    Tom remembers Ann claiming her mother refused to buy her a toy.

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    Re: Poor style?

    Quote Originally Posted by KSSEEJ View Post
    Tom, remember that Ann claimed that her mother refused to buy her a toy.


    ...
    Here's another possible correction, with 'remember' as an imperative. And if 'claimed' is stressed, I have no problem with the style.

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