Despite the (minor) mistakes, your English is quite good.Please help me improve the following sentences?
My name is Felix Wong, I am 24 years old. I have
alreadyThe "already" is unnecessary. graduated from City University of Taiwan with a Bachelor of Science in Physics. During my university eraA native would say "During my time at university", I acquired Your time at university is a past event, therefore your verbs must be in the past tense when referring to that time. lots of practical knowledge of physics and mechanical engineering, which I think, are perfectly related to the job of being a fireman. Also, I like taking part in numerous team oriented sports such as soccer, volleyball, basketball and my physical test score convincingly reflects Your physical test score is not the speaker nor the addressee but a singular third thing, therefore you have to conjugate the verb as such, with just an -s in this case. how strong I am. In fact, I am an outgoing, versatile and passionate peopleperson There is only one of you. and I think I have great potential to become a capable fireman and a good leader.
Thank you very much!
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