Student or Learner
can any one please correct my motivation letter
Dear sir /Madam:
I appreciate the opportunity to provide further background in support of my application for
That is scholarship it is a great chance to express myself and be part of change that is occurring in society .
My hope that to join to that scholarship to discover new cultures, communities and new ways to learn .
My dream is simple but I think it's also deeply, just to see my country and my society better and contribute in the development . I want to be part of changing and the most of ideas around me ,I think it is more important for me than be accepted in that scholarship, but I hope to give me a chance to achieve that through you and to be the reason that pushed me forward
Really , I do not want be the perfect idol girl that follow the rules any more that stated for THE GIRL CAN NOT TRAVEL ALONE .
Actually, It is my first time that I will travel outside the Arabian Countries . So , help me please to discover the world and think out of the box .
Because of love , change and passion I want be part of your community .
I'm afraid I don't have time to do the whole piece at the moment, but I would like to point out that "... be part of the change that is happening in society" is correct (you don't need to say "in the society").