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    A. This morning a young girl used a hammer to destroy a safe and stole a few million dollar gold.
    B. Yesterday my colleague was so thirsty for money that he murdered his girlfriend to steal her car.

    + Do these two sentences have a natural conversational tone?

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    Re: Gold

    These are more natural to me.

    A. This morning a young girl used a hammer to destroy a safe and steal a few million dollar in gold.

    B. Yesterday my colleague was so desperate for money that he murdered his girlfriend to steal her car.

    For B. "thirsty" is not natural, "hungry" is better but "desperate" sounds best.


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    Re: Gold

    Do these two sentences have a natural conversational tone?
    No, they don't.

    I can't imagine either cropping up in natural conversation.

    A. No safe capable of holding a 'few million dollars in gold' could be destroyed by a young girl with a hammer.

    B. He might be desperate for money but murdering his girlfriend to steal her car is a drastic way of getting it.

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    Re: Gold

    I agree that the scenarios are unlikely, although nothing would surprise me these days. I took the question to be about the language, not the credibility of the action it describes.

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    Re: Gold

    Quote Originally Posted by JMurray View Post
    These are more natural to me.

    A. This morning a young girl used a hammer to destroy a safe and steal a few million dollar in gold.
    As long as we're only talking about grammar, I think 'stole' is better here.
    A. This morning a young girl used a hammer to destroy a safe and stole a few million dollars in gold.
    The parallelism is between "used a hammer" and "stole the gold". She didn't use the hammer to steal the gold - only to destroy the safe.

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