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  1. sumon.'s Avatar
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    #1

    Are these two sentences fine?

    Hi,
    #1. Addison as a social reformer criticizes intending to change the society through his effetive medium of writing.
    #2. At the end, we can say, Addison was a great critic who contributed to the sotiety changing the taste of the society and reforming the society with the weapon of criticism.
    Thank you.

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    Re: Are these two sentences fine?

    I'm sorry, but I can't follow these at all.
    In the first one, I understand that Addison is a social reformer and that Addison is criticizing something, but who is trying to change society and is he using writing to change society? From the second I gather that it's Addison who writes, not whoever it is that is trying to change society.

    Addison, a social reformer, is an effective critic as he writes about... what? I'm still not sure.

    These are simply too complicated. We need more subjects and more finite verbs and fewer gerunds and participles for clear writing.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    #3

    Re: Are these two sentences fine?

    Thank YOU Barb_D.
    Addison, a social reformer, is an effective critic as he writes about the vice and follies of people of his contemporary society to change the society through his effective medium of writing

    At the end, we can say, Addison was a great critic who contributed to the society by changing the taste of the society and reforming the society with the weapon of his criticism.(Addison tried to change and .... )
    Do you understand now?
    Last edited by sumon.; 05-Apr-2012 at 14:45.

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    #4

    Re: Are these two sentences fine?

    Your first sentence still makes it very hard to see that Addison is the one trying changing society. It's also very, very wordy.

    Addison used his writing as a tool to create social change, using criticism [ of what? ] to reform society's tastes.

    Addison's critical writing was an effective tool to create social reform.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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