AMK-future writer
Junior Member
- Joined
- Jan 3, 2012
- Member Type
- Interested in Language
- Native Language
- Urdu
- Home Country
- Pakistan
- Current Location
- Pakistan
please guys help me in editing this synposis because I have done as much as I can. give it a polish that gives the agent and publisher both, a chill of inspiration.
An evil man named HEGAMONT, found the golden book from a cave and became invulnerable, took his revenge for killing his dragon by forcing King Jordan to leave the empire and become the Dark Emperor. The people of light went to a planet on the sky, by sitting on the five-headed dragons where they planned many ideas to oppose the emperor. However, when they find a prophecy, which said a boy would come and restore justice to the planet, the people of light is waiting for a saviour to come and do such thing for the greater good. Decades later…. A boy named Crimson, not more than fifteen, was nothing more than a farm-boy, finds a letter and realizes something strange has started happening. He met a black ghost who gave him a brief summary of his family and of planet “ACKLAMENTO”, and told that he is in this world with a great responsibility of bringing the happiness, glory and justice, back again. The next day, his parents gave him few of inherited gifts from the ancestors as if they knew the time had come. His parent were odd, just how odd, crimson is about to find. They went to a birthday party of his father’s cousin. they came back at midnight and felt something weird in the air, and on the half way back to home, the Chimneka (the loyal servant of king HEGAMONT) who was in stealth, was waiting for them, possessed crimson to kill his own father, he forced him out of his mind but in the end, he killed him. His mom vanished from the car by some sort of magic. In fact, she was not only a witch but something else too. Chimneka then possessed crimson to kill himself, but black ghost took crimson to the planet on the sky “meltoss” where he learnt the basics of magic, more about the planet on the sky and about the king Jordan who was the former emperor of planet Acklamento and got himself ready for the revenge. He studied magic day and night from the loyal teacher “eston” and practiced the magic from both hand and wand. He also came to know that Chimneka was torturing his brother, who went from the house just before the death of his father. He was dying for the revenge and wanted to go immediately, but his teachers forced him to stay, saying that he is not quite ready. He found that his mother had also left him a letter in his sweater that said that without the basics of magic is like a fire without a light. Nevertheless, the vengeance make the man blind, one midnight he was sitting alone at the garden weeping as he was reminded of the old times with his family, when he found something falling from the sky, he thought it was a meteor, but it was not a meteor, it was an egg of a shape-shifting phoenix. He became the Phoenix rider. Exiled King Jordan gave him permission for the revenge, as he came to know that crimson is now a phoenix rider, to test his worthiness as the saviour. Crimson went with some dragon riders as his guardian. Crimson searched for Chimneka in planet acklamento, and found his own brother against him. Because chimneka had possessed crimson’s brother, he attacked unmercifully, while crimson held amazed. He turned his back on his brother and went for the Chimneka who was standing on his bahamut, laughing, crimson attacked at him with his sword pointing at his chest, but his brother came in front of Chimneka and died. Crimson in desperation spelled a dark magic, which made Chimneka, a century old statue. He had torn the statue into pieces as well as the bahamut. Now his own phoenix shifted into … bahamut (lord of all dragons). Crimson was now ready for the revenge with the king or as he thought so, because he was not even half-ready to kill him. Moreover, he did not know one thing…. that he too is half-dark and half-light, How? It is said that when the chosen one will be chosen and will be in his last of teen’s years, the fiend will be released from its prison, where the prison is also a mystery. Moreover, he will possess someone orwill be possessed by someone too powerful, who after that will be insane, and will not even differentiate between friend or foe. He will only do one thing, kill or burn them. His parents are not human. What are they? Crimson will soon came to know, crimson was shocked to read “neither father nor son can kill each other nor mother or daughter unless being possessed.” WHY WAS HE SHOCKED, THAT IS ANOTHER REASON.
hope you will not discourage me.
Crimson Riddle
Synopsis:
hope you will not discourage me.