Interested in Language
I need a quick suggestion/advise on the correct usage of the following:
The case is, on pressing a certain button on a software, user is given an error message AFTER the button is pressed. I'm being asked which one to choose from the below:
"Instructions are not sent for accounts which are associated to different investment plans than its workplace investing model."
Following is what I suggested, since the message appears AFTER user has pressed the button:
"Instructions were not sent for account(s) which are associated to different plans than their workplace investing model(s)."
Thanks in Advance!
Last edited by mharis05; 11-Apr-2012 at 13:43. Reason: typo!
Can you please explain why?
I would like to add here that I am reluctant to use "could not be" instead of were not / are not.
Nevertheless, I have forwarded the following message for implementation:
Instructions have not been sent for account(s) associated to different plans than their workplace investing model(s).
"...are not sent" is used in the response as a general statement of policy and not as a direct/specific response ("....were not sent") to you pressing the button, but nevertheless, it provides sufficient notice to anyone who holds accounts "associated to ("with" would be better) different investment plans" .