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Jenniferhu

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Dear Teachers,

Please tell me if the following three sentences need a bit of polishing up, particularly words in bold.

1. [FONT=&quot]My English friends, on the contrary, would maintain their “British accent” more evidently while in Australia, and that made me wonder if it had anything to do with a desire to proclaim their identity.[/FONT]

2. It is, of course, inevitable for some outsiders to approach the way this group speaks.

3. [FONT=&quot]Consequently, their learning does not only involve issues with linguistics but, in a larger sense, with ever-changing multiple social identities as well.[/FONT]

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Then I doubt if anybody will respond. We post questions and responses here so that all members have to opportunity to read them.
 

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maintain their “British accent” more evidently

I don't think this works- maintenance is not making something more marked. Also, I see no reason for the inverted commas around British accent.
 

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Dear Teachers,

Please tell me if the following three sentences need a bit of polishing up, particularly words in bold.

1. My English friends, on the contrary, would maintain their “British accent” more evidently while in Australia, and that made me wonder if it had anything to do with a desire to proclaim their identity.

2. It is, of course, inevitable for some outsiders to approach the way this group speaks.

3. Consequently, their learning does not only involve issues with linguistics but, in a larger sense, with ever-changing multiple social identities as well.

Note: This post will be deleted shortly after potential answers have been given and received.

Jenny

Just so you know that this is not how forums work.
 

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Then I doubt if anybody will respond. We post questions and responses here so that all members have to opportunity to read them.

Well, thanks for reminding me of that, dear 5jj, but this time is ... let's just say different...there won't be any more removals, I promise.;-)
 

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I don't think this works- maintenance is not making something more marked. Also, I see no reason for the inverted commas around British accent.

How about forcefully?
 

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How about would accentuate?
 

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Sounds to much like going to the gym to me. Exaggerate? Their British accents would become more marked?
 

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Sounds to much like going to the gym to me. Exaggerate? Their British accents would become more marked?

Have their British accents more marked?
 

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Sounds to much like going to the gym to me. Exaggerate? Their British accents would become more marked?

I think it's getting more complicated than necessary. Just came up with this simpler one: would maintain a more pronounced British accent while in Australia. How's that, Tdol?
 
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