Student or Learner
There was no doubt that his essay was outstanding and he finally got a chance to relax. However, the next day, he died due to overwork. If he tried to take a rest while completing his essay, I think he would not die.
Just asking - how do you try to take a rest? (unless, of course, someone or something is trying to disturb you - example He tried to take a rest, but the flickering light prevented him.).
Incidentally, this and your similarly-titled other post make the same mistake; you are not asking us to help you [to] correct your sentences - in that case you'd be correcting them with our help. You are asking us to correct them (and by doing that we will have helped you).
You want to say 'Please help me by correcting...'. If you say 'Please help me to <verb>' then you are doing <verb> and you just want 'another pair of hands' - for example 'Please help me to move this paving slab'.