I'd like it if you could look at your errors and improve upon them.
[Not a teacher]Dear Lori
It was great to hear from you after such a long time! Today, I was thinking about the times that we spent together
andIt would sound a little more natural to say while checking my e-mail. There was nothing interesting, just adversementYou would say either "advertisments/adverts/ads" or "advertising". I would go for ads as this is an informal e-mail . I was just about to close my e-mail, when I received yours Saying "yours" would only be natural if "my e-mail" above referred to a specific e-mail and not your e-mail service, which is what I first interpreted it as. To avoid confusion, say "I received an e-mail from you". What a good surprise! You asked me what I've been doing. Well, I've got a new job as a computer engineeringIn computer engineering OR as a computer engineer at Microsoft. The office where I work is set onYou wouldn't say "set on", but next to the main street, and [the most convenient was to get there is go by foot,] You haven't mentioned what the most convenient thing was and you are referring in the past to a method of travel to a job you have now. I'd say, "the most convenient way to get there is by foot" because my house is not too far from there and the traffic is terrible. Do you remember my girlfriend Mary? I broke up with her. You wasWERE! right, she doesn't deserve me. I think it's never too late to restart. It would be lovely to see you some time. We could meet for lunch. Any chance that In an informal e-mail such as this, you would omit the "that" you are free next Saturday?
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