please correct to make it sound better

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TheShadow

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Hi,

"The phone is currently sold out, a new stock has been ordered and should be in soon"

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Hi,

"The phone is currently sold out; a new stock has been ordered and should be in soon"

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***** NOT A TEACHER *****

I think that in writing, your sentence is fine -- if you use the semicolon that I have added to your sentence.

In speech, you might want to say:

The phone is currently sold out, but a new stock has been ordered and should be in soon.
 

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"Stock" sounds odd to me. "A new supply" sounds better to me. Or just "...more have been ordered..."
 
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