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    Could you correct this short paragraph about the movie 'Dirty Dancing'?

    Hi teachers,
    Could you correct this short paragraph about the movie 'Dirty Dancing'?
    The plot in this film is about a family that goes to a hotel for their summer vacation. Baby, the daughther, is bored. One night while she is listening to the music from a party that takes place near where she is, she decides to go there.
    Baby meets Johnny Castle, a dance instructor. She is instantly attracted to him.
    As days go by the dance together to prepare a special dancing.
    They love each other very much, but their social differences kill their love relation.

    Thanks in advance.

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    Re: Could you correct this short paragraph about the movie 'Dirty Dancing'?

    Quote Originally Posted by learning54 View Post
    Hi teachers,
    Could you correct this short paragraph about the movie 'Dirty Dancing'?
    The plot in this film is about a family that goes to a hotel for their summer vacation. Baby, the daughther, is bored. One night while she is listening to the music from a party that takes place near where she is, she decides to go there.
    Baby meets Johnny Castle, a dance instructor. She is instantly attracted to him.
    As days go by they dance together to prepare a special dancing dance (OR dance routine).
    They love each other very much, but their social differences kill their love relation (OR relationship).

    Thanks in advance.

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    Re: Could you correct this short paragraph about the movie 'Dirty Dancing'?

    It's a "resort" not just a hotel.

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    Re: Could you correct this short paragraph about the movie 'Dirty Dancing'?

    These movies are often called a "coming of age" movie in which one of the characters makes the transition to adulthood.

    This is a coming-of-age movie about a teenage girl, Baby, on vacation with her family at a summer resort.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: Could you correct this short paragraph about the movie 'Dirty Dancing'?

    Quote Originally Posted by Barb_D View Post
    These movies are often called a "coming of age" movie in which one of the characters makes the transition to adulthood.

    This is a coming-of-age movie about a teenage girl, Baby, on vacation with her family at a summer resort.
    Hi,
    Could you tell me the reason to use '... a coming-of-age ..' with hyphens to talk about the movie and not with the definition?

    Learning

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    Re: Could you correct this short paragraph about the movie 'Dirty Dancing'?

    Quote Originally Posted by learning54 View Post
    Hi,
    Could you tell me the reason to use '... a coming-of-age ..' with hyphens to talk about the movie and not with the definition?

    Learning
    HIi

    I understand it is because "coming-of-age" is used as an adjective for "movie".

    Greetings,

    charliedeut
    Please be aware that I'm neither a native English speaker nor a teacher.

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    Re: Could you correct this short paragraph about the movie 'Dirty Dancing'?

    Quote Originally Posted by charliedeut View Post
    HIi

    I understand it is because "coming-of-age" is used as an adjective for "movie".

    Greetings,

    charliedeut
    Hi,
    Thank you for your help. So, it is a modifier, a group of compound words, for 'movie'.

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