[Grammar] Please help me with errors in my english cv

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I have just finished my cv for a job. But my english is not well to do it perfectly. Please help me correct grammar:

EDUCATION
From 2008 to 2012. HA NOI UNIVERSITY OF INDUSTRY

  • Bachelor of Business Administration with a fair degree.
  • Date of Graduation: June 2012
From 2004 to 2007. SOC SON HIGH SCHOOL

  • The Second Prize Winner of the 2007 Ha Noi examination for gifted high school students in Mathematics.
WORK EXPERIENCE
Match – May/2012. Bookseller

  • Used e-commerce to retail books at low price.
  • Took order from customers by phone or email.
  • Delivery in only 24 hours after confirmations.
  • Provided a quality service to customers.
February/2012 Salesman at Tien Tho Bookstore

  • Kept bookstands clean, aligned and sufficient.
  • Introducing and finding out what customers want to get.
  • Made them feel satisfied with goods and welcome.
September – October/2011. Waiter at Nam Son Restaurant

  • Greeted guests at restaurant, took and served orders.
  • Was required to assist co-workers in doing related duties.
All of my part-time work experience has helped me to be more confident, independent and keep good time management. Furthermore, I had learned a lot about computer knowledge and communication.
SKILLS
Computer

  • Certificate in computing: B grade
  • Advanced level in MS Word, Excel, Power Point, Outlook, Windows, Internet, Email.
  • Intermediate level in MS Access, Project.
Especially, I can type fast with ten fingers and use electronic commerce for sale and marketing.
Languages

  • English: Fair fluency. Toeic is 620 points.
  • Vietnamese: Active fluency
ACTIVITIES
In school

  • Key member of Students In Free Enterprise. Learned how to organize events about Sife teams, took part in other universities activities.
  • Team leader for most of subject presentations in class. I was responsible for summarizing ideas and designing slides with power point. Our score is always more than or equal to 8 points. It also taught me the importance of listening, supporting and respecting the others. They are very useful skills when working in group.
Living life

  • Play football in the role of a goalkeeper.
  • I like riding bikes and travelling to different places.
  • In my free time, I always read newspaper to update new knowledge, news and lastest events.
This is the end of the text. Thank you
 
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You might want to do some reading on formatting resumes/CVs. We don't list things like "From year to year" but just the year of graduation, for example. We don't use full sentences and we're not conversational.

For example: Especially, I can type fast with ten fingers and use electronic commerce for sale and marketing.

Typing speed: 60 WPM
Fluent in social media uses for sales and marketing (Though if this is true, you should give some supporting statements and not just say so.)


Please take a look at some Web sites that talk about these things and redo your resume following that guidance and post again.
 

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Thank for your advice. That is so important. But how about grammar? Do you think i made some errors?
 

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There is really no point in talking about grammar right now. The entire thing needs to be restructured.
 
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