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    Sentence structure

    Hey guys, I was wondering if somebody could give me a hand with this sentence structure.


    "The morning after he woke, with welts all over his body, to the rooster’s crow."


    The thought I'm trying to infer here is pretty obvious, I hope.

    I'm just wondering if it would be better as:

    "The morning after he woke to the rooster’s crow, with welts all over his body."

    Or any other way to say it.

    Cheers

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    Re: Sentence structure

    They are both fine.

    There are lots of ways to say it. For example

    'He woke the morning after to the rooster's crow, with welts. . . .'

    'With welts all over his body, he woke to the rooster's crow the morning after.'

    Rover

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    Re: Sentence structure

    Quote Originally Posted by HanibalII View Post
    Hey guys, I was wondering if somebody could give me a hand with this sentence structure.


    "The morning after he woke, with welts all over his body, to the rooster’s crow."


    The thought I'm trying to infer here is pretty obvious, I hope.

    I'm just wondering if it would be better as:

    "The morning after he woke to the rooster’s crow, with welts all over his body."

    Or any other way to say it.

    Cheers
    I think you need a comma after 'after'. It reads as if you're referring to "t
    he morning after he woke", but you're not.


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    Re: Sentence structure

    Cheers :)

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    Re: Sentence structure

    If you're writing the sentence, then you are trying to "imply" an idea. It is the reader who "infers" it.

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