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Hi, this is the first time for me.
I am preparing for the IELTS test and I am really worried about my writing. I am so afraid that my English may seem like "chinglish", therefore I really hope that you can give me some advice. THANK YOU A LOT FOR YOUR PRECIOUS TIME.
HERE IS the main paragraph in the report I wrote according to a given graph.(The graph illustrates the number of people in a station in London throughout one day.)
As we can learn from the line graph, the number of people at a London Station fluctuates grealty over the period. More precisely, the number stands at only 100 at 6 in the morning. Then, it climbs dramatically in the next 2 hours and finally culminating at 400 at 8am. After that there is a downward trend and the number goes down straightly to 180 two hours later. The coming 4 hours sees a slight growth in number and arrives at 300 at 2pm. However, the figures declines again greatly, and there is fewest people in this station at 4pm, only 99. The next 2 hours witnesses a rapid growth with the number soaring to nearly the same as that at 8am, at 6pm. From the point onwards, the number drops to a low point of 189 at 8pm. Then the number increases to 180 by 9pm before decreasing again to only 110 by the end of 10pm.
I am sure about wether I use the words and phrases correctly or not, would you please offer me some advice?
Thank you!
I am preparing for the IELTS test and I am really worried about my writing. I am so afraid that my English may seem like "chinglish", therefore I really hope that you can give me some advice. THANK YOU A LOT FOR YOUR PRECIOUS TIME.
HERE IS the main paragraph in the report I wrote according to a given graph.(The graph illustrates the number of people in a station in London throughout one day.)
As we can learn from the line graph, the number of people at a London Station fluctuates grealty over the period. More precisely, the number stands at only 100 at 6 in the morning. Then, it climbs dramatically in the next 2 hours and finally culminating at 400 at 8am. After that there is a downward trend and the number goes down straightly to 180 two hours later. The coming 4 hours sees a slight growth in number and arrives at 300 at 2pm. However, the figures declines again greatly, and there is fewest people in this station at 4pm, only 99. The next 2 hours witnesses a rapid growth with the number soaring to nearly the same as that at 8am, at 6pm. From the point onwards, the number drops to a low point of 189 at 8pm. Then the number increases to 180 by 9pm before decreasing again to only 110 by the end of 10pm.
I am sure about wether I use the words and phrases correctly or not, would you please offer me some advice?
Thank you!