phammaiphuong
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Hi guys,
I am newbie and I am learning the Toefl foundation writing skill. Here are my 2 body paragraphs of the topic "What are some disadvantages of advertisement? Explain and give some examples". I really need somebody to check the idea development for me as well as grammar, word choices,...etc. I really appreciate your help
thank you so much
"Firstly, advertisements encourage people to desire and buy goods, which, in fact, are not within their means. Particularly, advertisements give the consumers many attractive illustrations of the products with plenty of slogans that exaggerate the real quality of these goods. In addition, despite the fact that all companies must have some annotations such as “images are only for illustration” on their advertisements, they always try to make these sentences in small font size. It is because advertising is a mean of marketing, all companies try to make deceptive advertisements in order to increase the sale. As a result, with the combination of these advertising effects, consumers may be more interested in the products and then could not resist the temptation to buy them. A research shows that with appealing advertisements, consumers are more willing to buy the goods without thinking twice. Take my sister’s case for example. She once bought shoes on the Internet since they are presented in an attractive advertisement with many smart samples of them. The shoes on the Internet are advertised to be made of genuine leather and they are light pink. However, after receiving the shoes, she found that they are made of imitation leather and their dark pink color made them so ugly.
Secondly, advertisements can annoy people by disrupting the entertaining time. In fact, nowadays advertisements are popular, so much so many people find annoyed when they see advertisements on television, on newspaper, on the street and flyers in their house or adhering to walls of public space. In other words, many people are fed up of long-time advertisements disrupting their television programs, some feel annoyed when they catch many advertisements on the magazine or newspaper. Additionally, they find bored with flyers in their house or rampant flyers on the street. For example, I find so irritated that I always tend to turn off the television or turn to other channels when I see some advertisements interrupting my movie. These advertisements always make me angry when there is going to be some special parts of the movie. Consequently, I have to wait for a long time to see what is going to happen next and sometimes it also makes me forget the last scenes. Firstly, advertisements encourage people to desire and buy goods, which, in fact, are not within their means. Particularly, advertisements give the consumers many attractive illustrations of the products with plenty of slogans that exaggerate the real quality of these goods. In addition, despite the fact that all companies must have some annotations such as “images are only for illustration” on their advertisements, they always try to make these sentences in small font size. It is because advertising is a mean of marketing, all companies try to make deceptive advertisements in order to increase the sale. As a result, with the combination of these advertising effects, consumers may be more interested in the products and then could not resist the temptation to buy them. A research shows that with appealing advertisements, consumers are more willing to buy the goods without thinking twice. Take my sister’s case for example. She once bought shoes on the Internet since they are presented in an attractive advertisement with many smart samples of them. The shoes on the Internet are advertised to be made of genuine leather and they are light pink. However, after receiving the shoes, she found that they are made of imitation leather and their dark pink color made them so ugly."
I am newbie and I am learning the Toefl foundation writing skill. Here are my 2 body paragraphs of the topic "What are some disadvantages of advertisement? Explain and give some examples". I really need somebody to check the idea development for me as well as grammar, word choices,...etc. I really appreciate your help
thank you so much"Firstly, advertisements encourage people to desire and buy goods, which, in fact, are not within their means. Particularly, advertisements give the consumers many attractive illustrations of the products with plenty of slogans that exaggerate the real quality of these goods. In addition, despite the fact that all companies must have some annotations such as “images are only for illustration” on their advertisements, they always try to make these sentences in small font size. It is because advertising is a mean of marketing, all companies try to make deceptive advertisements in order to increase the sale. As a result, with the combination of these advertising effects, consumers may be more interested in the products and then could not resist the temptation to buy them. A research shows that with appealing advertisements, consumers are more willing to buy the goods without thinking twice. Take my sister’s case for example. She once bought shoes on the Internet since they are presented in an attractive advertisement with many smart samples of them. The shoes on the Internet are advertised to be made of genuine leather and they are light pink. However, after receiving the shoes, she found that they are made of imitation leather and their dark pink color made them so ugly.
Secondly, advertisements can annoy people by disrupting the entertaining time. In fact, nowadays advertisements are popular, so much so many people find annoyed when they see advertisements on television, on newspaper, on the street and flyers in their house or adhering to walls of public space. In other words, many people are fed up of long-time advertisements disrupting their television programs, some feel annoyed when they catch many advertisements on the magazine or newspaper. Additionally, they find bored with flyers in their house or rampant flyers on the street. For example, I find so irritated that I always tend to turn off the television or turn to other channels when I see some advertisements interrupting my movie. These advertisements always make me angry when there is going to be some special parts of the movie. Consequently, I have to wait for a long time to see what is going to happen next and sometimes it also makes me forget the last scenes. Firstly, advertisements encourage people to desire and buy goods, which, in fact, are not within their means. Particularly, advertisements give the consumers many attractive illustrations of the products with plenty of slogans that exaggerate the real quality of these goods. In addition, despite the fact that all companies must have some annotations such as “images are only for illustration” on their advertisements, they always try to make these sentences in small font size. It is because advertising is a mean of marketing, all companies try to make deceptive advertisements in order to increase the sale. As a result, with the combination of these advertising effects, consumers may be more interested in the products and then could not resist the temptation to buy them. A research shows that with appealing advertisements, consumers are more willing to buy the goods without thinking twice. Take my sister’s case for example. She once bought shoes on the Internet since they are presented in an attractive advertisement with many smart samples of them. The shoes on the Internet are advertised to be made of genuine leather and they are light pink. However, after receiving the shoes, she found that they are made of imitation leather and their dark pink color made them so ugly."
