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    Please make the sentence more concise if possible

    Although no consensus was made on the benefit side, many clinical studies adopted the therapy in the treatment of liver cancer until 2001.

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    Re: Please make the sentence more concise if possible

    Quote Originally Posted by NewHopeR View Post
    Although no consensus was made on the benefit side, many clinical studies adopted the therapy in the treatment of liver cancer until 2001.
    Why don't you try first and we will comment on your attempt? I think you've been around the forum long enough to realise that that's how it works.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Please make the sentence more concise if possible

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Why don't you try first and we will comment on your attempt? I think you've been around the forum long enough to realise that that's how it works.
    Well, thanks for the suggestion.
    My try:

    Though no consensus was made on the benefit, many clinical studies adopted the therapy to treat liver cancer until 2001.

    PS. I suspect that the use of "to treat" is somewhat tilted while "in the treatment of" sounds more natural.

    Your comment will be appreciated.

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    Re: Please make the sentence more concise if possible

    NOT A TEACHER

    You usually "reach" a consensus (or arrive at a consensus). See:

    COLLOCATIONS verbs reach a consensus ( also arrive at a consensus ) The committee found that it was unable to reach a consensus.

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    Longman Dictionary of Contemporary English
    Last edited by Chicken Sandwich; 27-Jul-2012 at 13:28. Reason: misspelt consensus

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    Re: Please make the sentence more concise if possible

    Quote Originally Posted by Chicken Sandwich View Post
    NOT A TEACHER

    You usually "reach" a concensus (or arrive at a concensus). See:
    Psst, now that nobody's looking, you should edit for typos
    Please be aware that I'm neither a native English speaker nor a teacher.

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    Re: Please make the sentence more concise if possible

    Quote Originally Posted by Chicken Sandwich View Post
    NOT A TEACHER

    You usually "reach" a consensus (or arrive at a consensus). See:
    Thank you.
    A lot of native English speakers used to use "consensus was made." Though not perfect, it is not wrong.

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    Re: Please make the sentence more concise if possible

    Quote Originally Posted by NewHopeR View Post
    A lot of native English speakers used to use "consensus was made."
    What makes you think that?
    Though not perfect, it is not wrong.
    It certainly isn't very natural.

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