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    #1

    Which sentence is better?

    - It is held twice a year in two voyages which take place in May and September.
    - Twovoyages are held every year, taking place in May and September.

    Which is more natural?

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    #2

    Re: Which sentence is better?

    The second version is more natural, to improve it I would say:
    "Two voyages are taken every year, in May and September".

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    #3

    Re: Which sentence is better?

    Tip for a better title: Two voyages.

    Before deciding, I'd want to know what it is, and why it's not mentioned in #2.

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    #4

    Re: Which sentence is better?

    Thanks all for the responses!

    It refers to a short-term study pogramme on the sea, its previous sentence is shown below:
    "U
    sing a ship as a floating campus, students worldwide get to have classes togetherwhile travelling around the globe. "
    - It is held twice a year in two voyages which take place in May and September.
    - Two voyages are held every year, taking place in May and September.

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    Re: Which sentence is better?

    It refers to a short-term study pogramme on the sea, its previous sentence is shown below:
    "U
    sing a ship as a floating campus, students worldwide get to have classes togetherwhile travelling around the globe. "
    - It is held twice a year in two voyages which take place in May and September.
    - Two voyages are held every year, taking place in May and September.

    Oops, I should have waited for more context.
    How about, "The classes are (
    or The programme is) held twice a year, on voyages which take place in May and September"?

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