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    A strange clause?

    "Levying on production of MSW is another effective method to minimize the waste, except the landfill and incinerator treatment. Citizens put economic factor as the first priority in their minds, so most of them may try their best in reducing domestic waste"

    I write the underlined clause to convey that citizens tend to really care about their spending. Is there anything wrong in the underlined clause, or is it so strange?

    Thanks for answering!

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    Re: A strange clause?

    plenty of possibilities here. One would be "The economic benefit was the most important for citizens, so most of them will probably try their best to reduce domestic waste."

    Another would be "Citizens' first priority was to save money, so most of them will probably try their best to reduce domestic waste."

    I suggested changing the wording in my examples to improve the flow of the sentence and to help the first part of the sentence transition a bit better into the idea of "so."

    Hope that helps!
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    Re: A strange clause?

    Hi,

    IMO, either "Citizens put the economic factor..." or "Citizens put economic factors..." sound better.

    charliedeut

    PS: I also have doubts about the wording of "as the first priority in their minds". Thinking about it.
    Please be aware that I'm neither a native English speaker nor a teacher.

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    Re: A strange clause?

    Newbie, thanks for your suggestion!!

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    Re: A strange clause?

    charliedeut, yeah, i also feel it is a bit strange, I better change it. Thanks so much!

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    Re: A strange clause?

    What about non-citizens? Resident aliens? Visitors?

    You may mean inhabitants or residents or simply the people.

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