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    Question Please Correct my letter/// as soon as possible

    Please correct this letter

    Dear Sir,

    I recieved a letter from the Admission Office but i want to know how can i register my required courses using my ID #?

    I was having my ielts with band score 6.0 but it is expire 4 months ago so i did another ielts exam last saturday and the ielts results will be given on 14th Sept,2012 ... Can i register for courses before getting the IELTS result?

    Since you know that i chose the Applied Mathematics Track which two required courses you advise me to take this semester.

    I wish to consider employment as a graduate student at AUS so i want to know how can i involve? And what are your conditions?

    Sorry for disturbing you.


    yours sincerly,

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    Re: Please Correct my letter/// as soon as possible

    More than anything else, look at your capitalisation. Go back and edit your draft making sure you capitalise the word "I" (first person singular) every time, all proper nouns (ie IELTS) and capitalising the first word of every sentence. Then we'll look at the content.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Please Correct my letter/// as soon as possible

    Please correct this letter

    Dear Sir,

    I recieved a letter from the Admission Office but I want to know how can I register my required courses using my ID #?

    I was having my ielts with band score 6.0 but it is expire 4 months ago so I did another IELTS exam last saturday and the IELTS results will be given on 14th Sept,2012 ... Can I register for courses before getting the IELTS result?

    Since you know that I chose the Applied Mathematics Track which two required courses you advise me to take this semester.

    I wish to consider employment as a graduate student at AUS so I want to know how can I involve? And what are your conditions?


    Sorry for disturbing you.


    yours sincerly,



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    I did as you told me esm2d2 .. I look forward to replying me

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    Re: Please Correct my letter/// as soon as possible

    Quote Originally Posted by Taleen View Post
    Please correct this letter

    Dear Sir,

    I have received a letter from the Admissions Office but I want would like to know how I can I register for my required courses using my ID number. #?

    I was having my ielts with got band score 6.0 on my IELTS but it is expired 4 months ago. so I did another IELTS exam last Saturday and the IELTS results will be given I will get the result on 14th Sept,2012. Can I register for courses before getting the IELTS result?

    Since you know that I chose the Applied Mathematics Track which two required courses you advise me to take this semester. As you know, I chose the Applied Mathematics Track. Which two courses would you advise me to take this semester? (Note - I think this is what you mean but I am not quite sure.)

    I wish to consider employment as a graduate student at AUS so I want to know how can I involve to apply. And What are your conditions of employment?

    Sorry for disturbing you.

    Yours sincerly faithfully,



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    I did as you told me esm2d2 emsr2d2. I look forward to your reply. ing me
    Please see my changes above in red. I am not sure that I understood what you were asking in the paragraph starting "Since you know ..." in your original so I have guessed at the meaning. It might not be correct.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Please Correct my letter/// as soon as possible

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Please see my changes above in red. I am not sure that I understood what you were asking in the paragraph starting "Since you know ..." in your original so I have guessed at the meaning. It might not be correct.
    Thanks alot emsr2d2...and sorry for the mistakes

    But I want to know is it wrong to say" required courses"??

    Also I have another question .. if i say "" In which days the classes will be?"" Is it true?
    Last edited by Taleen; 04-Sep-2012 at 15:51.

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    Re: Please Correct my letter/// as soon as possible

    Quote Originally Posted by Taleen View Post
    Thanks a lot emsr2d2...and sorry for the mistakes.

    But I want to know is it wrong to say" required courses"? It's wrong in the context of the sentence.

    Also I have another question .. if I say "In which days the classes will be?" Is it true correct? No, it's not correct.
    Bhai.

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    Re: Please Correct my letter/// as soon as possible

    Are you 100% sure that the person reading your note is a male? If not, then starting "Sir" is a bad idea.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: Please Correct my letter/// as soon as possible

    NOT A TEACHER

    Quote Originally Posted by Taleen View Post

    Also I have another question .. if i say "" In which days the classes will be?"" Is it true?
    Here's my alternative, 'Which days do I have class?'
    Last edited by Chicken Sandwich; 04-Sep-2012 at 20:54.

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    Re: Please Correct my letter/// as soon as possible

    Thanks all for your helping :)

    I want to improve my English so I need your help

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