Tedwonny
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- Jan 10, 2012
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- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Chinese
- Home Country
- Hong Kong
- Current Location
- UK
I was reading a model article for IELTS writing task 1 the other day when a native speaker approached me and commented that that piece of writing wasn't any good.
The article reads
"The diagrams illustrate the life cycle of the butterfly and the production stages of silk cloth. In the life cycle of the silkworm, eggs are first produced by the moth..."
He commented that
1) "illustrate the life cycle of the butterfly" should be "butterflies"
2) "the production stages of silk cloth" and "in the life cycle of the silkworm" are something the native speakers wouldn't say.
Was his comments right? I kind of disagree... Love to hear your views
Thanks a million!
The article reads
"The diagrams illustrate the life cycle of the butterfly and the production stages of silk cloth. In the life cycle of the silkworm, eggs are first produced by the moth..."
He commented that
1) "illustrate the life cycle of the butterfly" should be "butterflies"
2) "the production stages of silk cloth" and "in the life cycle of the silkworm" are something the native speakers wouldn't say.
Was his comments right? I kind of disagree... Love to hear your views
Thanks a million!