As it reads on the package

[Offroad]

Dear teachers,

Do these sentences read well?

'Naked' means pure as the package reads.
'Naked' means pure as it reads on the packaging.

Thank you!

 

[Barb_D]

I don't know what it means.

 

[Offroad]

Naked is just the brand of this coconut water, apparently!

 

[Barb_D]

Brand names can be anything.

 

[5jj]

'Naked' means pure as the package reads.
'Naked' means pure as it reads on the packaging.

These two sentences are still not natural. You may mean something like, "The name 'Naked' on this container suggests 'pure, 100%, unadulterated'.

 

[AlexAD]

Not a teacher nor a native.

Since the package reads both 'pure' and 'Naked', I find it valid to connect those words as the topic starter did.
I am very surprised that these sentences are not considered natural by natives.

 

[Barb_D]

Perhaps part of the problem with how unnatural they sound (and they do) is that we have phrases like "pure as the driven snow" to say just how pure something is. So when you see "Naked means pure as..." you expect to read what it's being compared to in terms of purity. It's pure as the packaging reads? That really stumps us. Packages read purely? No... so... what does this mean?

You would have the same problem with other phrases: Healthy as a horse, for example. (I guess this idiom assumes all horses are super healthy.)

"Hardy" means healthy as the package reads. -- You can see how this would be odd.

 

[Tdol]

Dear teachers,

Do these sentences read well?

'Naked' means pure as the package reads.
'Naked' means pure as it reads on the packaging.

'Naked' means 'pure' as the package says/states would work better IMO.