Look at the difference between "this" and "these". This is my finger. These are my fingers. As an aside, the right to privacy is not considered a liberty. On the whole, your writing is very good and you should have no problem passing any test.Hello ! I am currently training for the CAE and I would be very grateful if someone could please check this essay and maybe give it a mark. Thank you !
Was the French magazine Closer wrong to publish topless photos of a member of the royal family ?
There can be no doubt that, when the French magazine Closer decided to publish topless photos of the Duchess of Cambridge, they shocked the world. Such an invasion of privacy caused the magazine to be sued and the photos to be withdrawn within a few days of their publication. But while most see, in this issue, an incredible disrespect of the royal family, some argue that the freedom of the press gave every right to the tabloid to publish those pictures.
Few would dispute the fact that
thisthese kind of pictures represents such an invasion of privacy that it is almost grotesque. Everyone has a right to privacy, including celebrities. Furthermore, the fact that the pictures showed the Duchess of Cambridge added to the disrespect and shock felt worldwide.
On the other hand, the freedom of the press reminds us that Closer had
all the rightsthe right to publish those pictures. Moreover, it should be remembered that tabloids, such as this magazine, only exist thanks to thisthese kind of scandals; it was therefore natural for the magazine to publish these photos.
(When you write "such as this magazine", I first felt that this piece was part of an article written for a magazine. It may be better to write something like, "such as Closer".
In conclusion, whilst the freedom of the
mediasmedia staysis a vital part of the democracy, the publication of thisthese kind of pictures does not respect another liberty, the right to privacy, which is just as important and often forgotten by tabloids, and the identity of the person featured on these photos, be it a member of the royal family or not, does not change anything toregarding this elementary right.
(When you write, "the democracy", I assume that you are referring to the political institutions of your country. This could also be written, " is a vital part of democracy".
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