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Causemore

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Dear Nothern region,

We had undergone an exercise last week from (17 to 22 of September) for the battery backup installations to your region.Before we did the excise we had undergone an excise of phoning each and every branch asking if there is any additional work that needs to be done.

We also asked about,if your IT had finished the project of installing Vsats to your region as you know we still want to implement the VoIP solutions to your region, and we were told you were not yet finished.

After we had finished the project of installing the back up batteries , then our superiors called you about the success of the project then you told them that our guys did not finish the job,but yet we asked you before the project started and you said all branches were not ready about the implementation of VSATS.

So we now need to revisit all the branches to do the VoIP project

Attached is the VoIP requirements we need to be in place before we start the project.
Please let us know as soon as you are ready

Regards
 

bhaisahab

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Dear Nothern region,

We had undergone an exercise last week from (17 to 22 of September) for the battery backup installations to your region.Before we did the excise we had undergone an excise of phoning each and every branch asking if there is any additional work that needs to be done.

We also asked about,if your IT had finished the project of installing Vsats to your region as you know we still want to implement the VoIP solutions to your region, and we were told you were not yet finished.

After we had finished the project of installing the back up batteries , then our superiors called you about the success of the project then you told them that our guys did not finish the job,but yet we asked you before the project started and you said all branches were not ready about the implementation of VSATS.

So we now need to revisit all the branches to do the VoIP project

Attached is the VoIP requirements we need to be in place before we start the project.
Please let us know as soon as you are ready

Regards

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Causemore

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is it properly written,correct grammer etc
 

bhaisahab

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Is it properly written, correct grammar etc?

Please use correct capitalisation, spacing and punctuation.

"Dear Northern region,

We [STRIKE]had undergone[/STRIKE] carried out an exercise last week from (17 to 22 of September) for the battery backup installations to your region. Before we did the exercise we phoned each and every branch asking if there was any additional work that needed to be done.

We also asked [STRIKE]about[/STRIKE] if your IT had finished the project of installing Vsats [STRIKE]to your region[/STRIKE] as you know we still want to implement the VoIP solutions in your region, and we were told you were not yet finished.

After we had finished the project of installing the back up batteries, our superiors called you about the success of the project and you told them that our guys did not finish the job, but we asked you before the project started and you said all branches were not ready for the implementation of VSATS.

So we now need to revisit all the branches to do the VoIP project

Attached is a list of the VoIP requirements we need to be in place before we start the project.
Please let us know as soon as you are ready.

Regards"
I have made some changes, it's still not perfect but I haven't time right now to do more.
 

Causemore

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please help me on this one. I need to write an email urgently.
 
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