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    To turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger

    Hi there! Tell me, please, do I need a comma before "as" in this sentence "Beware of demons, as they throw temptations in your way. They can turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger…" I wonder if this expression "turn up in the guise of a cat" sounds natural in English. If something else is wrong in this sentence, please, tell me!

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    Re: To turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger

    Quote Originally Posted by Marina Gaidar View Post
    Hi there! Tell me, please, do I need a comma before "as" in this sentence "Beware of demons, as they throw temptations in your way. They [the demons or the temptations?] can turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger…" I wonder if this expression "turn up in the guise of a cat" sounds natural in English. If something else is wrong in this sentence, please, tell me!
    For me, it reads OK with the comma.
    Please be aware that I'm neither a native English speaker nor a teacher.

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    Re: To turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger

    Quote Originally Posted by charliedeut View Post
    For me, it reads OK with the comma.
    Demons can turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger.

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    Re: To turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger

    I guessed so. I was just trying to poin out that, as it stands, it is somewhat ambiguous.
    Please be aware that I'm neither a native English speaker nor a teacher.

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    Re: To turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger

    Quote Originally Posted by charliedeut View Post
    I guessed so. I was just trying to poin out that, as it stands, it is somewhat ambiguous.
    Any ideas how to make it less ambiguous? "Beware of demons, as they throw temptations in your way. Those demons can turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger…" Does it sound better? Or I can leave the phrase as it is?

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    Re: To turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger

    Quote Originally Posted by Marina Gaidar View Post
    Any ideas how to make it less ambiguous? "Beware of demons, as they throw temptations in your way. Those demons can turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger…" Does it sound better? Or I can leave the phrase as it is?
    Hmmm... Let's see.

    "Beware of demons: they can turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger to throw temptations in your way."
    "Beware of demons, who can turn up in hte guise of a cat or a stranger to throw temptations in your way."
    "Demons can turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger to throw temptations in your way. So beware!"
    "Beware! Demons can turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger to throw temptations in your way."

    There are probably more ways to rewrite them, and some that you will find better/more to your liking, but that's what I could come up with.
    Please be aware that I'm neither a native English speaker nor a teacher.

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    Re: To turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger

    I'm not entirely happy about 'guise'. In stories involving this sort of transformation it's common to say 'they can turn up in the form of a cat' or 'they can take the form of a cat' or just 'they can turn up as a cat'

    b.

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    Re: To turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger

    Quote Originally Posted by BobK View Post
    I'm not entirely happy about 'guise'. In stories involving this sort of transformation it's common to say 'they can turn up in the form of a cat' or 'they can take the form of a cat' or just 'they can turn up as a cat'

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    Thanks! I wasn't sure about "guise". I like your variants!

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    Re: To turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger

    Quote Originally Posted by charliedeut View Post
    Hmmm... Let's see.

    "Beware of demons: they can turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger to throw temptations in your way."
    "Beware of demons, who can turn up in hte guise of a cat or a stranger to throw temptations in your way."
    "Demons can turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger to throw temptations in your way. So beware!"
    "Beware! Demons can turn up in the guise of a cat or a stranger to throw temptations in your way."

    There are probably more ways to rewrite them, and some that you will find better/more to your liking, but that's what I could come up with.
    Wow! I like the second variant most. Taking into account your suggestions and BobK's comments, I'll get something like this "Beware of demons, who can turn up as a cat or a stranger to throw temptations in your way".

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