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    Doubt about a paragraph

    ''[3] One of the most important developments
    was the invention of communication satellites that
    allow images and messages to be sent wirelessly
    around the world. [4] One advantage of this tech-
    nology is that current events can be sent worldwide
    instantly. [5] News used to travel overseas by boat
    and would take weeks or months to spread. [6]
    When disaster struck the World Trade Center on
    9/11, most of the world saw it immediately. [7] To
    achieve this technological marvel, many satellites
    have been very costly, however. [8] As a result, many
    poor countries have been left behind and can barely
    participate in so-called “globalization.”''

    To improve the coherence of paragraph 2,
    which of the following is the best sentence to
    delete?
    (A) Sentence 4
    (B) Sentence 5
    (C) Sentence 6
    (D) Sentence 7
    (E) Sentence 8


    Hello; I felt really astonished when found out letter ''b'' correct. There is nothing to do 11/9 occurrence with the central thematic... Could someone explain why is letter ''b''??

    The answer sheet says: ''Although related to communications, the information contained in sentence 5 is not relevant to the
    discussion of modern communications satellites.''

    Thank you.

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    #2

    Re: Doubt about a paragraph

    Hmmm true, I agreed number#5 is the best sentence to delete.

    The paragraph talks about the invention of satellites and its benefits and its blockages.

    "News used to travel overseas by boat and would take weeks or months to spread" is by no means wrong, but not effective to tell in paragraph.

    It is what the question trying to ask.. making good flow.
    One advantage of this technology is that current events can be sent worldwide instantly. When disaster struck the World Trade Center on 9/11, most of the world saw it immediately.
    Last edited by AppleRome; 29-Sep-2012 at 17:07.

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    #3

    Re: Doubt about a paragraph

    (D), sentence 7 should be removed.

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    #4

    Re: Doubt about a paragraph

    Why, mod?

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    #5

    Re: Doubt about a paragraph

    Quote Originally Posted by AppleRome View Post
    Why, mod?
    Sentence #5 is making a comparison between how things were and how they are now and it makes sense.

    What do you think this sentence, #7, means? "To achieve this technological marvel, many satellites have been very costly, however." The whole paragraph is badly written, though.
    Last edited by bhaisahab; 30-Sep-2012 at 07:56.

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    Re: Doubt about a paragraph

    Quote Originally Posted by AppleRome View Post
    Hmmm true, I agreed number#5 is the best sentence to delete.
    AppleRome, please read this extract from the Posting Guidelines:

    You are welcome to answer questions posted in the Ask a Teacher forum as long as your suggestions, help, and advice reflect a good understanding of the English language. If you are not a teacher, you will need to state that clearly at the top of your post.

    Thank you.

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    Re: Doubt about a paragraph

    Thank you for reminder, Rover.

    Dont be bored to correct me & also other people one-by-one for same mistake later!

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