Revising a Memo for You-Attitude

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harris2005

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Revising the following memo to improve you-attitude.


Subject: Status of Building Renovations

We are happy to announce that the renovation of the lobby is not behind schedule. By Monday, October 9, we should be ready to open the west end of the lobby to limited traffic.

The final phase of the renovation will be placing a new marble floor in front of the elevators. This work will not be finished until the end of the month.

We will attempt to schedule most of the work during the evenings so that normal business is not disrupted.

Please exercise caution when moving through the construction area. The floor will be uneven and steps will be at unusual heights. Watch your step to avoid accidental tripping or falling.
 

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Revising the following memo to improve you-attitude.


Subject: Status of Building Renovations

We are happy to announce that the renovation of the lobby is on schedule. By Monday, October 9, we should be ready to open the west end of the lobby to limited traffic.

The final phase of the renovation will be placing a new marble floor in front of the elevators. This work will not be finished until the end of the month.

We will try to carry out most of the work during the evenings so that normal business is not disrupted.

Please be careful when moving through the construction area. The floor will be uneven, and steps will be at unusual heights.

Keep it short and simple.
 
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