A more elegant way of saying...?

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How can I rephrase "That is one of the reasons why..." as in "That is one of the reasons why I want to study Law"? I'm writing my personal statement and want it to sound elegant and formal. Thank you.
 

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How can I rephrase "That is one of the reasons why..." as in "That is one of the reasons why I want to study Law"? I'm writing my personal statement and want it to sound elegant and formal. Thank you.

Welcome to the forums.

It's almost always redundant to have "why" and "the reason" in the same sentence.
The reason I wish to study law is...
I want to study law because...
Resolving injustice facing the immigrant community is why I want to study law.


Please write your whole sentence. It will be easier to comment that way.
 

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Well I want to emphasize on ONE OF THE REASONS, because it is not the only reason. The sentence before was: "I believe in a just and democratic society and know I can contribute a lot to help the society reach that goal. That is one of the reasons..."
 

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This belief is one of the reasons I want to study law.

I'm not sure about your "I know I can contribute a lot" part. Perhaps "and I want to play a role in helping achieve/maintain such a society."

If you want to keep your words, you definitely need to delete "the" before society.
 

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Ok thank you! :-D
 
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