ziawj2
Member
- Joined
- Oct 3, 2010
- Member Type
- English Teacher
- Native Language
- Chinese
- Home Country
- China
- Current Location
- China
I moved to my new home, and wanted to throw a party. Then I wrote an invitation letter to invite my friends to come for it. In the letter, I wrote:
I want to share something happy with you. We family moved to a new house. The whole families are so excited that we decide to hold a dinner party . . .
I think the first sentence is a bit wordy, could I made a change:
I want to share a happy thing with you — our family moved to a new home. . . .
I am afraid 'thing' still seems strange. What is your opinion? How about " I want to share with you about my moving to my new home!"?
Thank you!
I want to share something happy with you. We family moved to a new house. The whole families are so excited that we decide to hold a dinner party . . .
I think the first sentence is a bit wordy, could I made a change:
I want to share a happy thing with you — our family moved to a new home. . . .
I am afraid 'thing' still seems strange. What is your opinion? How about " I want to share with you about my moving to my new home!"?
Thank you!
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