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  1. Newbie
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    Transformation of 3 phrases - is it correct?

    I'd like to transform these three phrases below to get straight definition, not kind of story-telling description (not sure how to express myself correctly ).

    Folding - horizontal movements pressed inward and moved the rock layers upward into a fold.
    My proposition:
    Folding is an occurrence (phenomenon?) of horizontal movements that press layers inward and move them upward into a fold.

    Faulting - the layers of rock cracked and one side shifted upward or downward.
    My proposition:
    Faulting is a process in which layers of rock crack and are one side shifted upward or downward.

    Pinching out - a layer of impermeable rock is squeezed upward into a reservoir rock.
    My proposition:
    Pinching out is a process of squeezing a layer of impermeable rock upward into a reservoir rock.

    Anyone can say whether it's correct? Also, would it be better if I used past tense, instead of present in definition?

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    #2

    Re: Transformation of 3 phrases - is it correct?

    Quote Originally Posted by oboeteru View Post
    I'd like to transform these three phrases below to get straight definition, not kind of story-telling description (not sure how to express myself correctly ).

    Folding - horizontal movements pressed inward and moved the rock layers upward into a fold.
    My proposition:
    Folding is an occurrence (phenomenon?) of[ what about 'occurs when'?] horizontal movements that press layers inward and move them upward into a fold.

    Faulting - the layers of rock cracked and one side shifted upward or downward.
    My proposition:
    Faulting is a process in which layers of rock crack and are one side IS shifted upward or downward.

    Pinching out - a layer of impermeable rock is squeezed upward into a reservoir rock.
    My proposition:
    Pinching out is a process of squeezing a layer of impermeable rock upward into a reservoir rock.

    Anyone can say whether it's correct? Also, would it be better if I used past tense, instead of present in definition?
    I don't mind 'a process in which' as much as 'an occurence of' (though I'm not a fan of abstract nouns in scientific/technical writing), but perhaps you could use 'is when X + <present tense verb>' for all three definitions... (That would avoid the problem of faulty parallelism - another obstacle to understanding written text.)

    b

    PS Most Br Eng users would prefer 'up|downwards', but that's up to you!
    Last edited by BobK; 22-Oct-2012 at 15:25. Reason: PS Added

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    Re: Transformation of 3 phrases - is it correct?

    What I wanted to get is a straight answer on question: "What is folding/pinching out/faulting?" and not "When does it occur?".

    It's kind of primary-school syndrome that I suffer from, since I got my test crossed in red, because my answers were exactly in that pattern .

    Thanks!

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    Re: Transformation of 3 phrases - is it correct?

    Quote Originally Posted by oboeteru View Post
    I'd like to transform these three phrases below to get straight definition, not kind of story-telling description (not sure how to express myself correctly ).

    Folding - horizontal movements pressed inward and moved the rock layers upward into a fold.
    My proposition:
    Folding is an occurrence (phenomenon?) of horizontal movements that press layers inward and move them upward into a fold.

    Faulting - the layers of rock cracked and one side shifted upward or downward.
    My proposition:
    Faulting is a process in which layers of rock crack and are one side shifted upward or downward.

    Pinching out - a layer of impermeable rock is squeezed upward into a reservoir rock.
    My proposition:
    Pinching out is a process of squeezing a layer of impermeable rock upward into a reservoir rock.

    Anyone can say whether it's correct? Also, would it be better if I used past tense, instead of present in definition?
    So the question was "What is faulting?" If that is the case, then the answer, expressed as a sentence would be "Faulting is what happens when rocks crack and one side shifts upwards or downwards". I don't see how you can get away from the fact that with cause and effect, you effectively always have "what happens when something else happens".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Transformation of 3 phrases - is it correct?

    Aha, that's it ' X happens when...'oboe

    KISS. I suspect I'd have been less free with the red ink than oboeteru's teacher!

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