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  1. Newbie
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    Poem check

    Hello I need help with checking my poem, I did it but I don't know if it is correct, can you please check it and tell me what I need to improve.

    Sunset over the sea
    Dolphins just here
    And the sun set slowly in
    I save it into my hands so I can be warm
    Looking at the reflection of the bright star
    My imagination flies

    Warm peaceful sunset
    Of orange color over me
    I keep on thinking about you and me
    Watching the big red star
    Bright on your eyes

    Hoping that the red ballon will never leave
    And keep it until you are here
    Knowing that now without you
    It's a long time that I won't see you
    Let my sunset fly
    As time passes by

    I wish you could be here
    Sharing this sunset with me
    Letting this day end
    Watching our sun getting out of our hands

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    Re: Poem check

    It's a poem so grammar isn't really an issue. I can't find any spelling or punctuation errors in it so, as far as I'm concerned, it's fine.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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