Bublifuk
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Hello,
Today, I recieved the photocopy of my essay written at SAT examination. If I can ask you to evaluate the essay and point out my weaknesses, I would be very grateful for it. I recieved 6 points of 12.
Thank you very much.
Assignment:
Do all people need to be creative? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.
Essay:
Sometimes in our life we need to devise new strategies or tactics in order to vanquish our opponents. Some people say that following the pattern is the most important thing and the others claim that being creative is the decisive factor in the competition. Everyone need to be creative.
Firstly, in the 16th centrury Galileo Galilei, who came up with notion that Earth is not in the center of our galaxy, paid his laife for inventing that. Despite he was burned, he created something, which none would think about. He was creative. He asked question about problems which was considered to be settled. However, his notion was praised 100 years later. Without his sense of creativity, people would still think that earth is the center of galaxy many years after.
In addition to that, people utilize their sense of creativity every day. Even though it is incorrect, children think up way how to crack test everyday. Simply as that, they are creative. Likewise, people think up ways how to get home as fast as possible. Yesterday, I found out way to home from school, which is 20 minutes faster, after 6 years of attendance. Every day people are creative.
To sum it up, without creativity manhood wouldn't be in situation as it is. Thanks to people who invent new notions or simply new ways of doing something we are where we are. Every people take part in process of developing.
...
Mirek
Today, I recieved the photocopy of my essay written at SAT examination. If I can ask you to evaluate the essay and point out my weaknesses, I would be very grateful for it. I recieved 6 points of 12.
Thank you very much.
Assignment:
Do all people need to be creative? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.
Essay:
Sometimes in our life we need to devise new strategies or tactics in order to vanquish our opponents. Some people say that following the pattern is the most important thing and the others claim that being creative is the decisive factor in the competition. Everyone need to be creative.
Firstly, in the 16th centrury Galileo Galilei, who came up with notion that Earth is not in the center of our galaxy, paid his laife for inventing that. Despite he was burned, he created something, which none would think about. He was creative. He asked question about problems which was considered to be settled. However, his notion was praised 100 years later. Without his sense of creativity, people would still think that earth is the center of galaxy many years after.
In addition to that, people utilize their sense of creativity every day. Even though it is incorrect, children think up way how to crack test everyday. Simply as that, they are creative. Likewise, people think up ways how to get home as fast as possible. Yesterday, I found out way to home from school, which is 20 minutes faster, after 6 years of attendance. Every day people are creative.
To sum it up, without creativity manhood wouldn't be in situation as it is. Thanks to people who invent new notions or simply new ways of doing something we are where we are. Every people take part in process of developing.
...
Mirek
