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    adjectives

    Are these sentences correct:

    1-They drug the animal and then capture it asleep.
    2-They drug the animal and then capture it weakened.
    3-They drug the animal and then capture it lying on the ground.

    4-They attacked him alone. (when he was alone)
    5-They attacked him asleep. (when he was asleep)

    6-They talked to him alone. (when he was alone)

    7-They moved toward him alone. (when he was alone)

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    Re: adjectives

    1-They drug the animal and then capture it asleep.
    Not good. Try:

    • They dragged the animal, and then they captured it while it was asleep.


    2-They drug the animal and then capture it weakened.
    Try:

    • They drugged the animal, and then they captured it while it was in a weakened state.


    3-They drug the animal and then capture it lying on the ground.
    Try:

    • They drugged the animal, and then they captured it while it was lying on the ground.


    4-They attacked him alone. (when he was alone)
    No. You shouldn't need alone there in any case. The context of a story should supply the necessary details. Example:

    • He was walking through the alley by himself when they attacked him.


    Or:

    • They waited for him as he walked down the alley by himself. When he saw them they attacked him.


    5-They attacked him asleep. (when he was asleep)
    No. Try:

    • They attacked him while he slept.


    6-They talked to him alone. (when he was alone)
    That's not so bad, but who was alone--him or them? Ask yourself if you really need alone there.

    7-They moved toward him alone. (when he was alone)
    No, you can't use that. In any case, the context of a story should supply the important details. Don't try to do everything with one sentence.

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