Hi! Here is an abstract from the fantasy style text which I'm trying to translate. Help me, please, to edit it. It should sound archaic, so the use of some archaic or old-fashioned words would be just great!
We were so reckless. We let Marena follow us…
(strokes his hair soothingly)
Sh… you must not worry now…
How long does it take to get to Polestar village?
About two hours with a good horse and less than ten minutes with Marena’s ash sorcery.
So she has been there already…
May be Marena is an artful foe…
…but she has one major vice. She tends to underestimate her rivals.
What do you mean?
Too overweening, Marena made no effort to conceal her presence. As soon as I discovered her following us, I led her astray and headed for this stronghold to ask for protection. So now Marena is probably a little bit… disappointed.
Student or Learner