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ThePersonal accounts in Vietnam hashave not been popular in Vietnam as the convenienceconvenient facilities of this accountsuch as cheques and electronic payments isare appliedavailable in only a few transaction officesbranches.
2. A savings bank is a bank (no comma required) which encourages people to save by accepting small deposits.
3. Depositing money in a bank is much safer than keeping it at home.
4. If you have a bank account, you can apply for a loan from your bank easily.
5. Deposit accounts and saving accounts are the simplest bank accounts. The customers can make deposits and withdrawals
according to their demandwhenever it is convenient to them.