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this is a few sentences that i have to explain .
so please correct me .
And if there is better expression or better way , also please teach me .

'Kids and Mom' is the place I used to work . I can’t submit Certificate of Income Amount because it was a kind of small business to sign up for 4 insurances and the pay was not that much. And I also can’t submit Bank Statement because I was paid in cash.so please understand that I can submit Certificate of Work Experience only .



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[STRIKE]This[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] These are a few sentences that I have to use to explain something, so please correct [STRIKE]me[/STRIKE] them.
And if there is a better expression or a better way to say something, [STRIKE]also[/STRIKE] please [STRIKE]teach[/STRIKE] tell me.

'Kids and Mom' is the name of the place I used to work. [STRIKE]I can’t[/STRIKE] I am unable to submit a Certificate of Income Amount because it was a [STRIKE]kind of[/STRIKE] small business to sign up for 4 insurances and the pay was [STRIKE]not that much[/STRIKE] quite low. [STRIKE]And[/STRIKE] I also can’t submit a Bank Statement because I was paid in cash. [STRIKE]so[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]lease understand that[/STRIKE] I can submit a Certificate of Work Experience only.

Thank you and have a great day!!

Please see my amendments above. My corrections are marked in red. I have also underlined "to sign up for 4 insurances". I don't know what you mean. Do you mean that you or the company should have had 4 different insurance policies but you decided not to sign up to them because it was a small company and you didn't earn very much?

You need to concentrate on your use of articles and the placement of punctuation. Do not put a space before a comma or a full stop. Always put a space after them.
 

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That's right About 4 insurances.
And thank you for the tips! I won't put a space before a comma or a full stop. :)
Thank you again. :up:
 

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That's right about 4 insurances.
And thank you for the tips! I won't put a space before a comma or a full stop. :)
Thank you again. :up:

I can’t submit a Certificate of Income Amount because it was [STRIKE]kind of[/STRIKE] too small a business to [STRIKE]sign up for[/STRIKE] pay for four insurance policies and the pay was [STRIKE]not that much[/STRIKE] quite low.


​I have made a further amendment based on your response. However, I'm still not quite sure why the lack of insurance policies means you can't submit a Certificate of Income Amount.
 

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If I got a job, I and the company should sign up for 4 insurances.
It means the company have a duty to report about the Income of thier employee.
So there isn't any record or Information that I could submit it.
 

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It sounds to me as if you are admitting that either you or the company failed to comply with a legal requirement. Are you sure you should be doing that? In fact, are you sure you should be admitting that even on this forum?
 
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