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    using Internet

    Please help me correct the following paragraph.

    The purpose of using InternetBoy students use Internet mostly for online games and searching for information is the next purpose, while girl students use Internet mainly for searching for information and chatting.

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    Re: using Internet

    Try to use "male students" and "female students" or simply "boys" and "girls". We rarely use "boy" and "girl" as adjectives.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: using Internet

    A comma before 'and searching for games is the next' will stop us mistakenly reading 'mostly for online games and searching for information'.

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    Re: using Internet

    The purpose of using InternetMale students use the Internet mostly for online games; searching for information is the second reason. Female students use the Internet mainly for searching for information and chatting.

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    Re: using Internet

    Quote Originally Posted by Ashiuhto View Post
    The purpose of using the InternetMale students use the Internet mostly for online games; the second most common purpose is searching for information. is the second reason. Female students use the Internet mainly for searching for information, and also for chatting.
    Remember to call it "the internet" (with or without capitalisation). In the first sentence you've used "mostly" and in the second you've used "mainly". Was there a reason for this?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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