[Essay] compulsorily control

[Ashiuhto]

Please help me correct the following paragraph.

According to our analysis and discussion, the phenomenon of student Internet addiction is getting more and more serious. In the thriving of Internet era, students should learn self-control and self-regulating, developing the good habit of surfing the Internet, finding the reasons which caused them addicted on the Internet and getting rid of them. Parents also should show consideration for kids, and compulsorily control their time on surfing the Internet, so as to promote the result of their schoolwork.

 

[emsr2d2]

You need to take care with "addiction" (noun) and "addicted" (adjective).

For example, we say "to become addicted to something", "to be addicted to something" but to "suffer from/with an addiction" or "have an addiction".

Look again at the part where you put "... finding the reasons which caused them to addicted ..."

 

[Ashiuhto]

According to our analysis and discussion, the phenomenon of students who suffer from Internet addiction is getting more and more serious. In the thriving of Internet era, students should learn self-control and self-regulating, developing the good habit of surfing the Internet, finding the reasons which caused them to be addicted to the Internet and getting rid of them. Parents also should show consideration for kids, and compulsorily control their time on surfing the Internet, so as to promote the result of their schoolwork.