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    Ashiuhto is offline Senior Member
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    spiritual / deadly

    Is the following list acceptable? Please give me a correction.

    The effects of insomnia are usually spiritual, not deadly:
    1. Cannot concentrate:Most patients have this problem.
    2. Bad temper:The patients get angry easily.
    3. Health:Insomnia is related to high blood pressure, diabetes and heart diseases.

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    Re: spiritual / deadly

    The effects of insomnia are usually spiritual, not deadly physical

    1. Cannot Difficulty to concentrate:Most patients have this problem.
    2. Bad temper:The Patients get angry easily.
    3. Health:Insomnia is related to high blood pressure, diabetes and heart diseases.

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    Re: spiritual / deadly

    Quote Originally Posted by Ashiuhto View Post
    Is the following list acceptable? Please give me a correction.

    The effects of insomnia can be psychological or physical. They include:
    - inability to concentrate:most patients have this problem.
    - irritability:patients get angry easily.
    - poor health:insomnia is related to high blood pressure, diabetes and heart diseases.
    That's one way to write it. High blood pressure, diabetes and heart disease aren't spiritual or psychological.
    You should use parallelism in lists. You can't have different items starting with nouns, verbs gerunds etc., and they should follow on from the introductory phrase.

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