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    The President and his ministers

    Please, would you take a look at my sentence and correct it. I am not sure if my punctuation is correct.

    1.The President and his ministers have become a clique, which has created its own rules and regulations, which have more to do with manipulation than just politics.

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    Re: The President and his ministers

    I cannot say there is anything wrong with it, although my own preference would be to omit both commas.
    Last edited by probus; 18-Feb-2013 at 05:35. Reason: typo

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    Re: The President and his ministers

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Please, would you take a look at my sentence and correct it. I am not sure if my punctuation is correct.

    1.The President and his ministers have become a clique, which has created its own rules and regulations, which have more to do with manipulation than just politics.
    Well, as I have mentioned previously in response to other posts, I am a "comma conservative", and I use, hopefully, only when they contribute to understanding on the part of the reader. I also believe that, at birth, we are granted a predetermined limit on the use of commas, and I have a feeling that I am way over my limit. But on a more serious note, (there's another one) I think your first comma is OK, but I would delete the second and replace "which" with "that".

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    Re: The President and his ministers

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am not sure if my punctuation is correct.
    With the first, do you see it as essential information defining the clique or additional stuff added out of interest?

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