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    Smile Mobile Causes more benefit than harm.

    Hello everyone,

    I want better sentence than this one.

    Mobile phones cause more benefit than harm to our society.
    Last edited by saloom2; 28-Feb-2013 at 23:51. Reason: Typo
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    Re: Mobile Causes more benefit than harm.

    Are you talking about mobile phones?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Mobile Causes more benefit than harm.

    Yes. And sorry about the typo. Anyway, what do you think of this sentence?
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    Re: Mobile Causes more benefit than harm.

    Now you have changed it to "mobile phones", you need to look at your verb agreement.
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    Re: Mobile Causes more benefit than harm.

    Done!
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    Re: Mobile Causes more benefit than harm.

    Quote Originally Posted by saloom2 View Post
    Hello everyone,

    I want better sentence than this one.

    Mobile phones cause more benefit than harm to our society.
    We don't "cause benefit". Something simply "benefits" something else. Although we can "cause harm", we can also simply "harm". Bearing that in mind, try your sentence again.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Mobile Causes more benefit than harm.

    Thanks a lot. What about saying 'Mobile phones harm our society, not benefit.' ?
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    Re: Mobile Causes more benefit than harm.

    That doesn't work, either. Now you are saying that mobile phones are of no benefit to our society. Mine is very useful indeed.

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    Re: Mobile Causes more benefit than harm.

    I can't actually say it well. :( Any recommendation?
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    Re: Mobile Causes more benefit than harm.

    Mobile phones benefit our society more than they harm it.

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