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    #1

    Smile it also increases the revenue factories earn by...

    Hello everyone,

    Well,I want better sentences than that one expressing the same meaning.

    Machines also increase the revenue factories earn by firing employees whom they are no longer demanded.
    I wish I had better English, but I work hard to improve it. I'm studying for IGCSE, so I'm only interested in BrE.

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    #2

    Re: it also increases the revenue factories earn by...

    Firing employees does nothing to increase revenue. It can decrease costs, and thus increase profits.

    Machines can lower labor costs.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: it also increases the revenue factories earn by...

    Yes, I just want to say the point you have just mentioned in a good way!
    I wish I had better English, but I work hard to improve it. I'm studying for IGCSE, so I'm only interested in BrE.

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    #4

    Re: it also increases the revenue factories earn by...

    Machines don't fire employees. At the moment, your sentence suggests that they do. Have another try.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #5

    Re: it also increases the revenue factories earn by...

    After amendments, that's what I have written in my essay "Nowadays, factories currently use machines in stead of human beings because machines not only produce products in a very high quality without any any mistakes, but also increases the net profit the factory receive by taking away employees whom factories no longer need" That what I do really mean!
    I wish I had better English, but I work hard to improve it. I'm studying for IGCSE, so I'm only interested in BrE.

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    Re: it also increases the revenue factories earn by...

    Not in a hurry but I just don't want anyone to forget my question, please!
    I wish I had better English, but I work hard to improve it. I'm studying for IGCSE, so I'm only interested in BrE.

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