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    silvan is offline Newbie
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    Personal statement sentence

    Hello,

    I have a sentence out of my personal statement for medical school that I am not sure if it is grammatically correct. I was hoping you may shed some light, and offer suggestions of how to fix it:

    "There was a single thought during that time that, even though I was of young age, I remember vividly today"

    The spot that troubles me is "... during that time that, even..." It seems awkward to say, so I was wondering if it is correct? If not, what could be a good fix?

    Thanks,

    Silvan

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    Re: Personal statement sentence

    Change the first "that" to "which" and see if it still sounds odd to you.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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